this is the revise essay for my friend. the attached file is the original essay from my friend,
here is the comment from the professor:
Hi Jia Lin! For your revision, if you choose to do one, I want you to take more time to begin with the specific elements of the story in the poem and then, and only then, make your conclusions about what that language might imply. <– plus you need to include evidence / analysis of the language to support your claim. I am including some helpful notes below:In order to successfully explicate Robert Frost’s poem, you must work with the actual imagery, actual story of the poem. You can’t make the poem fit your reading of it.Here is the story: the speaker is walking in the woods in the fall and he encounters two roads (a choice, yes, but a choice between two roads he encounters on a walk). He wishes he could walk down both at the same time but realizes that he cannot. He says he regrets that he cannot be one person and walk down both simultaneously. He looks down one for a while and notes where it vanishes in the undergrowth. Without looking at the other one, he takes it. As he is walking down it he remarks that it seems just as fair as the other one and perhaps (and perhaps not) it has a better claim because it was grassy and wanted wear (personification). But he realizes that both of the roads look the same and that morning no one had walked on either one yet. He then says that he will save the other for later, but he realizes that because of how life is busy he will likely not be back to walk down the other one. The poem then shifts to the future tense, with the poet saying that many, many days (“ages and ages hence” = hyperbole) in the future he is going to say with a sigh that he encountered two roads in a wood and that he took the one less travelled by and that it has made all the difference. He is not saying this is what he thinks now, nor is he looking back at the choice he made a long time ago. He is just saying that he will someday a long time from now say these things with a sigh. One also needs to keep in mind that, in the rest of the poem, he has explained that no one had walked down either road that morning, so he is basically saying that someday, he will say that he chose the one less travelled even though he had not. This is the story of the poem. This is the imagery.The road is a choice (a symbol), so choice is an important part of the poem, but whatever meaning one wants to explore must come from the specific story of the poem’s text / language. For your rewrite, you need to make sure this story is the primary part of your explication—and you need to consider the personification of the grass. You need to think about the hyperbole of the “ages and ages hence. “ Without these observations you are not explicating the poem—and without including the specific story (and how the language details it), you are also not explicating the poem. Thinking about the meaning of the poem is important, but it should not be done at the expense of the actual story; otherwise, you are just bending something to mean something other than what it actually is. Don’t forget: a symbolic choice between two roads can mean / imply / suggest other things, but that symbolic choice between two roads is always, no matter what, still a choice between two roads, so if you are going to figure what it possibly means, it must come from what a choice between two roads actually is. Stick to the story, text, in the same way. What Frost says is in the poem and the story he outlines is what matters first and foremost. Make sure it is clearly and accurately outlined in your explication (and then let the meaning flow from the specific context).lastly, this essay is basic on the poem uder(just to give you an idea of the essay):The Road Not TakenRobert Frost, 1874 – 1963Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,And sorry I could not travel bothAnd be one traveler, long I stoodAnd looked down one as far as I couldTo where it bent in the undergrowth;Then took the other, as just as fair,And having perhaps the better claim,Because it was grassy and wanted wear;Though as for that the passing thereHad worn them really about the same,And both that morning equally layIn leaves no step had trodden black.Oh, I kept the first for another day!Yet knowing how way leads on to way,I doubted if I should ever come back.I shall be telling this with a sighSomewhere ages and ages hence:Two roads diverged in a wood, and I—I took the one less traveled by,And that has made all the difference.